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Acrostic Haiku- SUN by ~lilmoongodess:iconlilmoongodess:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern


Shining orb of light
Under which we cultivate
New leaves and new souls
©2009 ~lilmoongodess
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This is my entry for :iconmattiello: 's Acrostic Haiku Contest. (read the article: [link] )

This was really fun, and I wrote about six of these- and we're only allowed to submit one. Oddly enough, the first one I did, I liked the best :)

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*kabukikatze May 9, 2009, 1:24:49 PM
After the crit above, I'm not sure what to add. I really enjoy your haiku, though, so I'll just tack on a bit of encouragement for you to do more!
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~lilmoongodess May 9, 2009, 2:35:19 PM
Awww thanks so much peaches!! I changed the word "ball" to "orb" ...I think that gives it a much deeper flavor...if i can say that :)

thanks for the fav too! your support is always awesome :hug:

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Life is what we make it, and the world is what we make it. The eyes of the cheerful and of the melancholy man are fixed upon the same creation; but very different are the aspects which it bears to them.
Albert Pike
:iconmattiello:
=Mattiello May 12, 2009, 11:31:10 AM
Refer to this tutorial for three word acrostic haiku.

[link]

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[link] Counting Clouds - an exciting book!

[link] My tutorials!


If you LOVE it then suggest it to a GM - now!
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~lilmoongodess May 12, 2009, 12:37:47 PM
So a three letter word does not qualify as an acrostic haiku? there must be more than one word?

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Life is what we make it, and the world is what we make it. The eyes of the cheerful and of the melancholy man are fixed upon the same creation; but very different are the aspects which it bears to them.
Albert Pike
:iconmattiello:
=Mattiello May 12, 2009, 12:46:50 PM
Yes, it does qualify, but take a look at the tutorial and see that you have to add the "wings".

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[link] Counting Clouds - an exciting book!

[link] My tutorials!


If you LOVE it then suggest it to a GM - now!
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~lilmoongodess May 13, 2009, 3:23:18 AM
Ah, yes...I see that now. I think i'll pass. I like this the way it is :) Could you please take this off of your list for the contest? :)

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Life is what we make it, and the world is what we make it. The eyes of the cheerful and of the melancholy man are fixed upon the same creation; but very different are the aspects which it bears to them.
Albert Pike
:iconmattiello:
=Mattiello May 13, 2009, 11:01:07 AM
Of course.

Try another one if you like.

--
[link] Counting Clouds - an exciting book!

[link] My tutorials!


If you LOVE it then suggest it to a GM - now!
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~lilmoongodess May 14, 2009, 4:05:54 AM
I think I'll pass, thanks :) but I'll certainly be following the contest to see the entries :)

--
Life is what we make it, and the world is what we make it. The eyes of the cheerful and of the melancholy man are fixed upon the same creation; but very different are the aspects which it bears to them.
Albert Pike
:iconmattiello:
=Mattiello May 14, 2009, 9:07:24 AM
Great. :D

--
[link] Counting Clouds - an exciting book!

[link] My tutorials!


If you LOVE it then suggest it to a GM - now!
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